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What Else is Love?

Using Pat Benatar's "Love is a Battlefield" to inspire an original extended metaphor from writers

A song by Pat Benatar is inspiring student writers to try new techniques with the traits of idea development and word choice.

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Student Sample Being Sought: Middle School

WritingFix is currently seeking a middle school student's sample for this writing assignment. Teachers: if you can help us obtain up to three student samples, along with a digital photo of the students and a signed permission slips, we will send you either a complimentary copy of the Northern Nevada Writing Project's Secondary Writing Guide, or you may choose from any of our NNWP publications.

Write to us at publish@writingfix.com and use 'Love is a Battlefield' in your e-mail's subject line, if you have a student sample to share with us.


Student Sample: High School

Love is a Bumper Sticker
by Laura, 9th grade writer

Love is a bumper sticker
Once plastered on in ardent emotion and a flicker
   of something that was in you eyes
Passion, wasnt it?
You try and remember now as you rock in your wicker
Passing-by thoughts to the metronome time-ticker
   that taunts you from the dashboard
Sure, the stickers peeling and the rust grows thicker
But its still there nonetheless.
Youll always know you pickeder
(Well, isnt that a kicker?)
Loves left its mark and its trail of mess
Lanes behind you, at the stoplight, and cars to your left.
You can never drive too fast to escape
   the bumper sticker
Love, it clings like a bumper sticker.


 

Student Sample: High School

Treasure Hunting
by Tanis, 12th grade writer
 
You've traversed land and sea,
counted your steps,
checked your bearings,
but your time spent
on searching
for buried treasure
has yielded nothing.
You can't search for love.
 
You have no map,
and your wandering is useless.
You'd best just stay put.
Take a rest
and then start digging
into the ground on which you now stand.
 
Clunk!
Your shovel scrapes against
that valued thing, that treasure you seeked
but only found when
you stopped searching.
 
The beach kept it hidden
until you dared
to finally look past the surface.
Now, as you pull it up from the ground,
the chest gets lighter, easier to lift,
Wanting to come to you.
 
You sit it atop the earth,
having recovered it from the depths,
and take a seat beside it,
looking it over,
brushing sand away.
The lock gleams,
but you have no key.
 
No, don't go looking. 
Patience will be provident.

 


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