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Student Samples: Between Repeated Catch Phrases

creating a story that "stacks" on itself and repeats a catch phrase

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Student Samples: Upper Elementary

The Worst Picture Day Ever
by Tarique, fourth grade writer

Today when I woke up, I thought it was our Halloween party so I put on my Halloween costume. On the bus, my friend told me it was picture day! I hit myself on the head, and then blurted, “I wish I was stuck on Pluto.”

At school, I said to myself that it could not get worse. But it did! Bang! The kick ball hit me right in the eye. I yelled “Ow!” When I noticed I had a black eye, I whispered, “I’m really going to Pluto tomorrow.”

At lunch, I sat beside my best friend. Someone called him, and his hand hit my juice…Whoosh! Right on my shirt! Then I said to myself, “Why don’t my mom and dad rent a space ship to Pluto?”

Once it was picture time, I started sweating. My clothes were very wet. I whispered, “I can’t take a picture like this.” So… I dashed to my locker. When I looked, my other clothes were not there! I got dizzy and then I fell fast asleep. When I woke up, it was the end of the day.

I went home, told my mom what happened, and she said, “Sometimes picture day is bad, even on Pluto.”

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The Worst Day Ever
by Noah, fifth grade writer

As I got out of bed, I got my hat for Crazy Hat Day and my “I hate teachers” shirt. As I went to the kitchen, my sister moaned, “Glue your hat on your head! Then you will be more crazy.” So I did. When I went downstairs, I tripped down the stairs and landed in a dog present.

My mom came to me and said, “I can’t believe that you have a black eye and…is that what I think it is? On picture day?”

“What?” I screamed in terror, “Today isn’t picture day.”

When I went outside, I slipped in mud. I sat there and thought to myself, “I should just dig a hole to Tokyo.”

On the bus, a pizza met my muddy face with a SPLAT! When I got to school, the janitor had a bucket of water and SLIP! Water spilled on me and it looked like I peed in my pants. All of the kids laughed at me. In class, I accidentally stapled my shirt while I was stapling my essay. I should just dig a hole to Tokyo.

We all went to the picture taker. I was next to go as I saw Billy Doof, the doof who doofed me with his doofin’ pizza. He blinked during his picture, but he got a second picture taken.

It was my turn. The picture man looked at me and said, “Ready, 3,2…” as I picked my nose and sat on a tack. “1”, he finished. FLASH!

The next day, I saw the yearbook and myself. The lighting was bad and everyone laughed at me, especially Bily Doof. Then I boomed, “So what!? Your last name is Doof!” and all of the kids called, “But you said your last name is Dean!”

I never said I should dig a hole to Tokyo again, and I lived happily every after. But I can’t say the same for Billy Doof.

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The Absolute Worst Picture Day Ever!
by Annie, sixth grade writer

“Erg! Oh my gosh!" It’s 8:30 and I just woke up for school which starts at 9:00! I ran downstairs and threw on my All Star Converse and remembered that today was SCHOOL PICTURE DAY! I splashed water on my face and put a comb through my hair. Today just plain clothes would not do. And speaking of doo - I stepped in doggie doo at recess. Why can’t I just dig a tunnel to England?

After cleaning my shoe off, I discovered I forgot my lunch. Later, while we were doing a unit on Helen Keller, my great guide person, Nicole, led me into a tree, messing up my hair! Why can’t I just dig a tunnel to England?

At lunch, someone spilled grape juice on me. Now my cream colored shirt looked like those disgusting yogurts. Also my no-longer friend Jodey’s mustard flew off her sandwich and landed on me!

At pictures, my so-called friend Carrie put baby powder on my face, saying I had a zit and she was covering it up! I went into a sneezing fit and I fell through the picture screen. Why can’t I just dig a tunnel to England?

When my family got the pictures my mom said, “Well (long pause), they’re okay,” with uncertainty. She also said, “There’s always retakes!”


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