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Planning a
Fierce Wondering

a list of story ideas brainstormed
in one's Writers Notebook

The books of author Marissa Moss and Ralph Fletcher are inspiring student writers to try new techniques with the traits of idea development and voice. Join us in teaching (and adapting) this on-line lesson and sharing your students' work.

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Elementary Samples:

by Carson, second-grade writer
inspired by a fierce wondering: What if the world was made of candy?

If the world were made of candy, I imagine the ocean would be made of root beer with brown waves that make foam when they hit the pop rock shore.  Pop! Pop! On the ocean would be a peanut butter ship with a Snickers wrapper for a sail and a licorice octopus with chocolate eyes.

If the world were made of candy, I would declare war against jelly bellies because I've gotten cheated when I thought it was black berry and it was really centipede flavor.  What a rip off!  I would shoot them all with my chocolate gun that shoots raisins.

(Carson also made an illustration for his story. Click here to view it online.
Click here to print the story to share with your own second graders)

$ Ka-Ching $
by Austin, sixth-grade writer
inspired by a fierce wondering: What if my hermit crab was a spy?

What does my hermit crab do when I’m asleep? First, he checks my vitals to make sure I’m asleep before he makes his move. I believe he crawls into his house, which is a coconut, and digs until he reaches the bottom of his cage. Then he lasers his way through the bottom of the tank and table with his laserclaw ™.

To the floor he falls. THIS WAS NOT PART OF THE PLAN because he realizes he is potential prey for a big black fur ball (my dog); fortunately, she was having a party downstairs. (Yet that’s another story).

He will dig until sun first appears over the hills. He must continue this process for nights on until he reaches the center of the earth to find the A.W. HQ, Agents at War, which deals with spy business such a defeating Dr. Ka-Ching and his henchman, a group called Ka-Bam. The Center of the Earth may be accessed from anywhere on the earth, which is lucky for the hermit crabs, even though it may take some time to dig there.

My hermit crab is the second most powerful agent. He has had three successful missions so far. One involved the evil Dr. Ka-Ching whose symbol for his gang is $.

Ka-Ching had captured Eugene, the Curly Shell’s Treasurer, Number-Six Ranked Agent. Hermie had only his laser claw against 300 Ka-Bam (the name for Ka-Ching’s Henchman). He always had been a good climber so when Hermie made his way up his cage, he wall made a laser hole through the top, which fell on top of and knocked out all of the Ka-Bam, and they went to prison. Hermie can always do so much in so little time.

That was his latest mission; I wonder what he will do tonight…

Is it just us, or does Austin's writing style remind you of Marissa Moss's other great book inspired by kids making notebooks, Max's Logbook?

Why is this great little book out of print? Find a used copy, if you can.

Click here to open/print Austin's story.


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