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Fairy Tales in New Settings

fracturing fairy tales by moving
their times and places

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Student Samples: Elementary

Shelia and the Seven Kangaroos
by Douglas, first grade writer

Once upon a time, there was a girl named Shelia who had an Evil Step mom named Queenie. Queenie was not the fairest in all of Australia, and she was very jealous of Shelia’s beauty. So she sent Shelia to live in the Outback where she lived with seven kangaroos.

The seven kangaroos were always hungry and Shelia gave them food.

One day the Queen was talking to her magic boomerang and she found out that she still was not the fairest of all in Australia. The Queen told the hunter to go out and find Shelia and kill her.

The hunter tried to kill Shelia, but he told her to go back to the seven kangaroos’ house and live there. When she got to the house, the seven kangaroos were gone! Shelia saw a handsome bloke, named Tyler, so Shelia jumped into his jeep and they lived happily ever after.

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The Magician of Zo
by Eden, fifth grade writer

A long, long time ago--back in 1950--Dana Whayne was born. Her Auntie Lou was doing the job of her mother, after her real mother mysteriously disappeared.

Now, fifteen years later, Dana is taking Mrs. Wicken her bread. Mrs. Wicken was the most wicked woman of all the New Orleans, and Dana despised her. On down the road, the wind started to pick up, and the water started to crash along the crispy shorelines.

“Oh my! I must get home before I get caught in a hurricane!” Dana thought out loud.

Halfway home from Mrs. Wicken’s house, Dana looked over and saw the hurricane’s waters rushing towards her. The hurricane alarm sounded, and everyone rushed around as if it were a dream.

Just then, Dana was swept off her feet by a mighty wind. “Oh no!” Dana yelled. “I have to hurry!” She turned in circles, looking for a shelter, but she stopped in her tracks, hearing a dog’s bark. Then she saw a hen house. Before taking cover, she ran and picked up her dog who had barked just moments before.

While running towards the hen house, Dana pulled her dog’s ear up to her mouth and very gently whispered, “Oxie, I’ll explain all of this later.”

She rushed into the hen house, slamming the door behind her. She was safe. For now.

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A few hours later, the hen house landed with a crash...

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Student Sample: Middle School

The Three Gansta Pigs
by Kelsea, sixth grade writer

Once upon a time, there was a rich and glamorous wolf. He had big gold chains and nice diamond earrings. He was a very successful business wolf, and he carried a big suitcase full of paperwork and fancy business stuff.

There were also these three gangsta pigs. They talked with a strange slang, like gangsta rappers. The first pig’s name was G-Dog, the second was named Perci-P, and then there was G-Unit, the third pig. All these pigs saw the wolf climb out of his car in the hood where they lived. They said, “Dang! He is so fly!”

G-Dog was thinking that he wanted to be like the wolf, so he said to the other pigs, “Why don’t we just rob him of all his money and jewelry?” All the pigs thought about it. G-Unit, the oldest pig, didn’t think it was a good idea, but the other pigs did not listen to him.

The first pig, G-Dog, went up to the wolf and said, “Yo, dog! Don’t flinch, and it will only hurt a little bit.”

The wolf said, “I don’t think so!”

G-Dog tried to hit him, but the wolf whacked him hard on the head. “Oh, snap!” said G-Dog.

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