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Put 'em on a Talk Show!

fracturing a fairy tale by putting its
characters on television

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Cinderella on the Ellen Show
written and performed by Mr. Cavin’s 6th & 7th Graders


  • Ellen, the Show Host
  • Cinderella
  • Prince Charming
  • Security Guard
  • Alex

Scene Begins with Ellen sitting with Cinderella (Both Cross-legged) and Charming

Ellen: Our first two guests are part of the heartwarming story that we have all heard about as children, or read to our children, but in the recent cover page story of People Magazine, Paparazzi have unveiled some shocking curtains which makes us wonder about their real story and not the happily after in Disney’s version. So here are Cinderella and prince charming. So what happened to you two?

Prince Charming: Should I sit like that? (crosses his legs)

Cinderella: STOP EMBARRASSING ME! I will explain the story. Well, the first twelve years of our marriage gave us the impression of a happily ever after life, like in Disney’s version, but after awhile, things changed and we grew apart. But the only real reason that we broke up was because he cheated on me and, after two years, he made me clean again. It was like living with my step sisters again.

Prince Charming: That statement is completely untrue!

Cinderella: Wait! do you want to see the evidence? I have it on his blackberry. But before I reveal this evidence I would like to continue.

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