A Picture Book Writing Lesson from WritingFix
Focus Trait: IDEA DEVELOPMENT Support Trait: VOICE

Navigating WritingFix:

WritingFix Homepage

Picture Book Lessons Homepage

Idea Development Homepage

________________

Navigating this lesson:

Lesson & 6-Trait Overview

Student Instructions

Teacher Instructions & Lesson Resources

Student Writing Samples from this Lesson

_________________

On-line Publishing:

Publish your students at our Ning!
(You must be a member of our "Writing Lesson of the Month" ning to post.)

 

Student Samples Page:
Unlikely Diary Keepers

reporting on learned facts with an unusual "Dear Diary" scenario

The writing of author Doreen Cronin inspired student writers to try new techniques with the traits of idea development and voice. Join us in teaching (and adapting) this on-line lesson and sharing your students' work.

You can publish up to three of your students' edited and finished stories at this page.

Use these samples to inspire your student writers! Discussing the strengths of published student samples before, while, and after using this on-line assignment is important. If your students are engaged in trait- or skill-inspired discussions about any of the samples we've posted here, they will produce better writing, especially if you help them take their writing all the way through the writing process.

Thank you, those who share their students' writing with us.


Additional Student Samples Being Sought:
Grades 1, 2, 5, 6, 9, 10, 12

Learn more about WritingFix's policies for publishing student work by visiting our Publishing Student Writers Information Page.

WritingFix is currently seeking additional student samples from this writing assignment that can be featured in this space. Submitted student work must show evidence of revision, editing, and the final draft must be typed and sent through e-mail.

To have us consider your students' writing for inclusion on this page, you must post the writing to our Ning page dedicated to this lesson. Click here to access that page. You must first be a member of the Writing Lesson of the Month Network in order to post.

Student Sample: Early Elementary

From "Diary of a Frog "
interactively written by Mrs. Black's kindergarten class

March 1
I don't use my tongue for eating. I use my sticky tongue to play checkers.

March 6
When I was a todpole, I ate algae. Now I am a frog and I eat crickets.

March 7
When the kids are gone, I invite turtle over to play Leap Frog.

 

You can print Mrs. Black's interactive charts to share with your class by visiting the Teacher Resource Page that comes with this lesson.


From "Diary of a Panda "
by Maddie, third grade writer

January 11:
Everyone at school says I’m gigantic, but I only weigh 300 pounds. Maybe I should eat less bamboo. I was very depressed today.

January 12:
I’m going to have a sleepover with my cousin Red Panda. We are going to have so much fun!

January 13:
We had so much fun! We ate bamboo and climbed trees. My mom made some cookies too.

January 14:
The good thing about being a panda is that in school we can spend 12 hours eating, and our only homework is eating. That’s why I have an excellent time at school and I always get an A+.

January 15:
The bad thing about being a panda is there are only 1,100 of us left because people keep on cutting down our bamboo trees.


You can print Maddie's entire 10-day diary to share with your class by visiting the Teacher Resource Page that comes with this lesson.


Student Sample: Upper Elementary

From "Diary of a Seahorse"
by Maddie, fourth grade writer
(Maddie reads her story aloud at her local Barnes and Noble Bookstore at left)

October 1
Dear Diary,

Can’t wait till tomorrow because we’re all starting to order our costumes because it will take a while for Mom and Dad to get the costumes on us, and the whale man said we should order them soon because it is going to take 3 weeks for the creatures to make them.

Oh yeah, today while I was taking a swim, I saw a seahorse having babies and the babies gather together after they are born. It was interesting. One other thing: half of my brothers and sisters are short mouth seahorses, and the other half are long mouth seahorses because mom married a short mouth seahorse and she is a long mouth seahorse.

Sincerely,
Emma (the seahorse)

 

You can print Maddie's entire 10-day diary to share with your class by visiting the Teacher Resource Page that comes with this lesson.


Student Sample: Middle School

From the "Diary of an Ugg Boot "
by Anna, seventh grade writer

December 22, 2010
Dear Diary,

Ugh! I hate being a Classic Ugg design!  Every person that walks into this Vernon Powell store wants the new Bailey Buttons in the new colors for this season.  I think that I heard the clerk say they were raspberry rose, country blue, and aqua sea, but I'm just plain old chestnut!  Oh, I bet that I'll never get bought! 

                                                                    Your jealous friend,
                                                                    Sam

December 23, 2010
Dear Diary,

I just watched another pair of Bailey Buttons get sold.  Each time that I see a pair of them get carried out of the store, I wonder why that mean old "make me blush" Vera Bradley purse, Casey, doesn't leave instead of them!  Today, she wouldn't stop reminding me how we Ugg's originally got our name from the Australian word for ugly!  So I tried to kick her off the shelf, but I ended up falling off myself.  Now, besides my feelings being hurt, my soles are too.

                                                                    Your sore friend,
                                                                    Sam


You can print Anna's entire 10-day diary to share with your class by visiting the Teacher Resource Page that comes with this lesson.


 

From the "Diary of a Trident Splash Strawberry and Lime Flavored Piece of Gum Named Max"
by Autumn, eighth grade writer

Saturday, Oct. 13th
Dear Diary,

I can’t believe it. I was actually bought today. This girl and her mom came in and purchased me at the check out counter. I think the girl’s name must be Jessica, because I heard her mom call her Jessie. But anyway, Jessie put me in her purse. I’m so happy, and I just can’t wait to be chewed! But sometimes, I can’t think why anyone would buy me. I mean, I know that North American kids spend more than a half billion dollars on gum each year and all, but why would they pick me? Trident Splash isn’t very popular, especially ‘cause I’m not pink. But, oh well. Jessie bought me, stuck me in her purse and walked out of the store with me, so I must be popular with her.

Love,
Your excited friend, Max

 

You can print Autumn's entire 10-day diary to share with your class by visiting the Teacher Resource Page that comes with this lesson.


Student Sample: High School

From "Ski Slope Diaries "
by Nicholas, eleventh grade writer

December 11
Dear Diary,

So I finally made it up the slopes with my family and friends and was ready to head down the hill. Unfortunately, my father who majored in physics and mathematics forced us to understand the slopes before we could have fun. He told us the equation he came up for the slope was 2/5x – y = 3, and in order to ski, we had to find the slope-intercept form. Luckily for me, I remembered the slope-intercept form was y = mx + b, and m = slope and b = y-intercept.

2/5x – y = 3
-y = -2/5x +3
y = 2/5x – 3

slope = 2/5
y-intercept = -3

 

 

You can print other Ski Slope Diary entries to share with your class by visiting the Teacher Resource Page that comes with this lesson.

 

 


WritingFix Homepage Lesson & 6-Trait Overview   Student Instructions
Teacher Instructions & Lesson Resources  Student Writing Samples

© WritingFix. All rights reserved.