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Student Samples: Giving Voice to Opposites

voice descriptors inspire a two-voice
monologue or poem

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Student Samples: Early Elementary

The Lizard and the Gecko
by Brandon, first grade writer

Lizard:
I have a blue belly.

Gecko:
I have cool spots.

Lizard:
I eat crunchy crickets.

Gecko:
I eat juicy bugs.

Lizard:
I like to dig in the sand. I am a blue belly lizard.

Gecko:
I like to climb trees. I am the leopard gecko.


I am the Lizard. I am the Dog.
by Andrew, second grade writer

Lizard:
I like to eat green crickets and sit on a rock.

Dog:
I like to eat juicy meat and chase fun toys.

Lizard:
I am afraid of scary humans.

Dog:
I am afraid of windy storms.

Lizard:
I think about climbing hard rocks. I am the lizard.

Dog:
I think about eating snake bones. I am the dog.


Bunnies and Wolves
by Patti, third grade writer

Bunny:
I like to eat juicy carrots.

Wolf:
I like to eat yummy meat.

Bunny:
I like to hop high, bounce and sleep.

Wolf:
I like to hunt for prey, eat and run.

Bunny:
I have humongous ears and a pink nose.

Wolf:
I am gray, brown and have sharp teeth.

Bunny:
I like to hop, play, eat and hide in the green bushes all day.
I make a little soft whisper.

Wolf:
I like to hunt in the meadow. I make a loud growl.

Bunny:
I am afraid of people, big dogs, loud guns and loud noises.
I am the bunny.

Wolf:
I am afraid of bigger predators and thunder. I am the wolf.


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Student Samples: Upper Elementary

Little Brother, Big Sister
by McKenna, fourth grade writer

Little Brother:
Every morning I wake up and get dressed, for I am the little brother.

Big Sister:
Every morning I wake up and eat breakfast, for I am the big sister.

Little Brother:
I love collecting in my free time and guess what...I collect pennies, and rocks ’cause I am the little brother.

Big Sister:
I love listening to music while I relax on the sofa, for I am the big sister.

Little Brother:
My whole life is basically all about collecting, singing, football, and soccer, for I am the little brother.

Big Sister:
On the other hand, my whole life is basically about reading, doing sports and writing, for I am the big sister.

Little Brother:
I’m a cat lover ‘cause I am the little brother.

Big Sister:
I’m a polar bear fan and I want to stop Global Warming, for I am the big sister.

Little Brother and Big Sister:
Either way we are both a team.

 


I am the Drummer. I am the Flutist.
by Madeleine, sixth grade writer

Drummer:
Competition…
My life.
But really,
Isn’t every life
A competition?
More importantly,
Is competition everyone’s life?
I think it is,
For I am the drummer.

Flutist:
Competition…
Use-less, unimportant rivalry.
Why is everyone so caught up in competition?
Competition is jealousy.
I know, for I am the flutist.

Drummer:
Standing out,
I love standing out.
Cutting edge.
Original.
Out there. I love the feel of the spotlight
And every pair of eyes
On me.
I love when I start the song.
1, 2, 3, 4!

 

(Click here to read Madeleine's entire poem, as well as three poems from fellow classmates)

Student Samples: Middle School

I am the Athlete. I am the Poet.
by Sophia, seventh grade writer

Poet:
I don’t think of winning, I think of making my work my own.
When I’m writing, my words mean something to me.
I don’t mind of those reading them don’t feel the same.

Athlete:
Winning.
That’s almost all I think about.
I try to involve anything I can with winning.
Eating the fastest.
Staying up the latest.
Walking the most.

Poet:
I’ve lost in my life plenty, and that’s okay.
With writing there is no winning or losing.
At least not to me.

Athlete:
I can’t lose.
I just can’t.
I work too hard.
I practice too much.
What’s the point if you don’t win?

 

(Click here to read Sophia's entire piece, as well as two pieces from fellow classmates)

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