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Four Metaphor Poetry

stretchiiiing a metaphor four times to build a poem

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Student Samples: Early Elementary

Hope
by Ben, second grade poet

Hope is a treasure chest
Waiting to be opened.

Hope is a penny
Waiting to be picked up on a
Walk home from school.

Hope is a pile of leaves
Waiting to be jumped in.

Hope is a campfire
Waiting to be lit.

 

Dreams
by Joseph, third grade poet

A dream is a door
To wonderful worlds
Where everything can be anything
And nothing can be harmed.

A dream is a birthday cake
A sweet thing to make us happy
And wishes made will come true
To fill our lives with glee.

A dream is a pillow
To soften hard times
And help us forget bad events
To make things easy in your sleep.

A dream is a campfire
To glow and light the path
To brighten your life
And to warm and protect you.


(Click here to view/print Joseph and three of his classmates' four-metaphor poems.)

Pride
by Danielle, fourth grade poet

Pride is a rock
Hard and smooth
Pretty yet ugly
Light yet heavy.

Pride is a good grade
Given to us by hard work
Smiles yet frowns
Clapping and cheering.

Pride is your kin and friends
Sad and happy moments
Looking back
Laughing yet crying.

Pride is a smart decision
Difficult yet easy
Right but wrong
Truthful yet lying.


(Click here to view/print Danielle and three of her classmates' four-metaphor poems.)


Student Samples: Upper Elementary

Happiness
by Ben, fifth grade poet

Happiness is a book,
Changing on every page,
Sometimes you'll get a milkshake; sometimes you'll get spinach,
Like an ocean wave, going up and down.

Happiness is a ship,
Sailing on an ocean,
Like notes in a song, up and down,
A work of art.

Happiness is a milkshake,
Cold and tasty,
Quite a treat,
Until you get a brain freeze.

Happiness is a piece of chocolate,
Sweet and tasty,
Melts in your mouth,
But doesn't last forever.


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Art
by Caelan, sixth grade poet

Art is a river
Flowing over the landscape
A never-ending thing
With natural beauty.

Art is time
Constantly changing
Always evolving
And going on forever.

Art is a mountain
With natural beauty
Bold and inspiring
And comes in all shapes and sizes.

Art is a thumbprint
It has individuality
It is different from everything else
It has “you” written all over it.


(Click here to view/print Caelan and three of his sixth grade classmates' four-metaphor poems.)


Student Samples: Middle School

Love
by Alexis, seventh grade poet

Love is a best friend
That will never leave
Your side when you
Feel like you want
To cry or when you
Feel like you are lost
In a nightmare.
Love always comes
To find you.

Love is the intense heat
Of the sun warming
Up your heart,
Making your eyes
Sparkle like diamonds
On a ring.

Love is a box of
Chocolates on
Valentine’s Day
From that special
Someone. When
You open up the box
And smell the
Chocolate, caramel,
Coconut, or peanut butter,
It makes you want
To taste love
Even more.

Love is a tear drop,
Sliding down a woman’s
Cheek when she finds
Out that he is with
Somebody else,
That he just doesn’t
Love her the way
She wants him to, or
That he says it’s time
To see other people.
Love is just not fair.

(Click here to view/print Alexis and two of her classmates' four- metaphor poems.)

Devotion
by Olivia, 8th grade poet

Devotion is a book
It will always be there to help you to
Escape your day and
Comfort you

Devotion is a guide dog
It stays by your side and
Helps you through the blind spots in life

Devotion is the ocean
Even if it slips away, when you need it
It will ride the wave back in

Devotion is a tree, strong and sturdy
It stands by your side
Rooted

(Click here to print and read two of Olivia's classmates' metaphor poems.)


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