Revised and Edited Student Samples:
I Come From...
by Joanna, first grade
I come from stuffed animals.
I come from a blue dog named Ox.
I come from my bike.
My bike is yellow with a bell on it.
I come from my new doll.
I have three tiny little dolls.
I come from Polly Pocket.
I change the little clothes on her.
I come from my soccer ball.
I kick my blue soccer ball.
I come from my movie.
I watch The Last Unicorn.
I come from my house.
I have a two story blue and white house.
I come from the forest.
I hear birds singing in the wind.
I come from Dad!
We wrestle together.
I come from Mom!
We like to play Candyland.
I come from my sister.
We like to play Pet Shop and Polly Pocket.
I come from all these wonderful people, places, and things that I love.
I Come From...
by Jack, second grader
I come from my green, white, and red fire trucks
that I always play with.
I come from my ambulance.
I always park at my firehouse.
I come from my police car
that is always at my police station.
I come from my Ford GT
that goes really fast.
I come from the firehouse
where I look at fire tools.
I come from school.
I learn new stuff and draw fire trucks.
I come from my home.
I play with toys and run with my race dog.
I come from the park.
I go down the curvy slide.
I come from my friend’s house.
We play Hot Wheel cars.
I come from Dad and Mom.
I go to races where we see my favorite car.
I come from firemen.
I talk to them about fires.
I come from Alex.
I chase him around the house when he steals things.
I come from these special things, special places,
and special people that are all special to me.
I Come From...
by Henry, third grade writer
I come from a mom who plays Monopoly with me
when she gets a break from work.
I come from my dad who reads Narnia books to me
and my brother before bed.
I come from Grandpas S. who watches western movies
with me after lunch.
I come from Grandma S. who lets me sit on her lap
in her special black leather chair.
I come from Grandpa W. who jogs with me in New York.
I come from Grandma W. who reads lots of books with me
on the flowered couch in the living room.
I come from my cowboy hat that I wear outside
on sunny days.
I come from my bathtub that I take baths in
because it is relaxing.
I come from my sneakers that I wear
while running really fast.
I come from Colorado
where I was born.
I come from my cat that I play with
when I’m not tired.
I come from my house
Where I play Monopoly
by myself.
I come from my room where
I sleep and play with my stuffed animals.
I come from a bathroom
where I take baths in the bathtub.
I come from my backyard
where I roll in the grass and play on my small basketball hoop.
I come from a park where
I play with my brother.
I come from all these special things that I play with and love.
I Come From….
by Lydia, fourth grade poet
I come from many places, people, and things.
I come from Grandma M. and Aunt Barb who support me in
all my performances and who always make me feel proud of
myself.
I come from my__ Nana that makes me precious quilts with memories inside all the strands of string she stitches.
I come from my mom and dad who hold me tight through tough times so I don’t feel left alone in the open world.
I come from my bed that keeps me warm and into my other world when I dream about cookie boats and ice-cream lakes.
I come from my backyard with the birds singing while I’m swinging on my old and creaky swing set and I feel like I’m flying on an airplane.
I come from my kitchen where the warm and sweet and scents of pancakes enter my mind like I enter theirs.
I come from Le Roy, the town that made the squishy and colorful substance called Jell-O.
I come from the basketball court where I can make my parents proud by doing a swish into the strong netted hoop.
I come from dance class where I can express myself in every way by curling into a ball, ready to do a somersault.
I come from my dog Henry who I know is there to play with me and makes me smile with all his funny moves that he does when he is enjoying his dog bones.
I come from my puppy and my baby blanket where my puppy has been held in my arms ever since I was a little girl.
All of these things shape my life, and will forever and ever.
(Click here to open/print Lydia and two of her classmates' poems.)
I Come From
by Kaitlan, fifth grade writer
I come from a warm summer's day...
at the rugged rocks
with the clear water running through my toes.
I come from my ruby red dress...
waltzing around the room like a princess
with my brown teddy bear.
I come from my best friend Cameron...
with his monstrous backyard
where we lay and watch the bright colors turn to dark.
I come from a warm softball field...
with a crack of a bat and a smack of a glove
running, out of breath, with every step I take.
I come from a slippery sleeping bag...
out in the wilderness
where the only thing covering me is nature's beauty.
I come from a blue stage...
lit with fun and laughter
and a bright spotlight shining on me
while I sing my favorite songs.
I come from my friends and family...
who are there for me through thick and thin
with a warm smile on their faces
ready to warm my heart.
(Click here to open/print Kaitlan and three of her classmates' poems.)
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