Inspiring Revision through the Mentor Text:
Nothing Ever Happens on 90th Street is a pretty long story to get through in one sitting. I like to share the story in parts over a few days. On the first day of reading, just be sure to get through the four pieces of writing advice offered by Eva's neighbors.
On later days, as you share a bit more of the story, remind students of the four pieces of advice that Eva received and have them listen specifically to where in her story Eva follows the advice. Many pages of the text have an instance where Eva follows all four pieces of advice as she unfolds the next piece of her story. You can Xerox certain pages (the page where Baby Joshua makes his first appearance, for example) and have students look for the four pieces of advice in just that short piece of text from the book.
Once students are very familiar with the four pieces of advice the book offers to all writers, so much so that they can recite it to you if asked, set up four corner stations in your classroom. Each corner is to be devoted to one of Eva's four neighbors. If you have the ability to post a picture of each neighbor in his/her corner (I use my digital camera and make a full-page photo of each neighbor), you should. If you want to paraphrase each neighbor's advice on a sentence strip (have your students help you make the paraphrase) and post it in the corner too, you should. The idea is that when students take a draft of their writing to each corner, they devote themselves to pretending that neighbor is sitting in the corner with them, and they need to pinpoint where in the draft that neighbor would suggest they make improvements.
Have students re-read the rough drafts to their own "writing about nothing" prompts. Then divide the class up equally to move to the four corners. At each corner, have students work in pair or in triads; they need to read one another's writing and come up with a specific place in the writing where the neighbor (whose corner they're in) would advise them to revise. Students need to mark ideas on their drafts before moving to the next corner and repeating the process.
Once students have moved to all four corners, they need to plan their revision. In the rewriting, they need to change three things from their original draft. In changing, they need to be certain that they're following the advice of three of the four neighbors. Tell them that other students will be reading both of their drafts and trying to figure out whose advice the changes seemed to have been inspired by.
Model this revision task by using the model below (or one you create about yourself). Ask students to see if they can figure out whose advice is now present in this new draft:
I tapped my number two pencil on the edge of my desk and stared at the classroom clock again. Five minutes until the end of the day. Time was creeping along much too slowly, and I could think of nothing to do to make it move faster. My teacher lowered her glasses on her nose and told me to stop tapping. I wondered what would happen if I didn't stop. Would she really send me to the principal with only five minutes left in the day? Thomas, my friend who sits two seats behind me, looked bored too. I arch an eyebrow when he looks at me. He arches one back at me, and we snicker silently. Not silent enough because the teacher scolds me again. I look at the clock. Still four minutes left to go.
Rewrite the writing prompt on the board: Write about a Time when Nothing Really Happened to You.
Tell students you are proud that they wrote like students their age are supposed to write when they created their first drafts. Now, they must try to write about doing nothing in a way that three of the four neighbors would
be proud of. They have four pieces of advice to think about when planning their revision; they need to think about that advice and choose three to help them make their writing better.
If you can show them both your first model and your revised model at the same time, this helps many students. For those who need help getting started with their revised draft, read aloud the first sentence of Nothing Ever Happens on 90th Street. Read it again and again. Challenge students to craft a sentence that sounds similar but is about the nothing moment they have written about. For example...
I sat in my desk, tapped my pencil, and sighed and stared as the clock's big hand refused to move.
This is revision, not editing (which comes next). so they should not worry about spelling and punctuation. This is their chance to get their ideas down a second time, but this time in a way that uses even better details and word choice.
Extend the Learning:
Assign a few more quick prompts to your students over the next week or two. This time, before students start writing, remind them of 90th Street's advice by pointing to the four corners of the classroom. Challenge them to use the advice in their first drafts so they can try some new craft tricks during revision time.
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